-2020 Additional- Blueline inks on this page now finished by original inker Dan Green. Pencils retained separately.
PAGE TWO & THREE
6 panels
Note: I'm going for the same vertical panel effect on these two pages as well. Here I'm trying to accomplish the effect of moving from the smallest POV to the largest, starting from the SUB-ZONES (where HWers still live) and ending w/ an ESTABLISHING-SHOT of HW, besieged by the K'Lar living ships.
Also, I'm going to be sparing in narrative in these panels. Two medium sized captions a panel. Max. Preferably, I'd like them placed at the top of the panel. At least the first panel. On the last panel, I'd like room on the bottom. Make sense? Okay, here goes...
1 CUT TO a SUB-ZONER (a Homeworld lower-class citizen who dwells beneath the surface of the Royal City). A rag wearing bald man is running for his life, taking up most of the panel and CROPPED-OFF. He's looking over his shoulder at the reader to see what is chasing him and he's seeing his own nightmares come to life. His face shows all his terror.
2 PULLBACK as a K'LAR WARRIOR grabs up the Sub-Zoner, snapping the poor man's back and killing him instantly. This is seen in the mid-ground. We're in the subterranean world of Homeworld's degenerates here. The K'Lar have just discovered it. In the FG is a K'Lar warrior, looking the reader in the eye, gnashing his teeth.
3 PULLBACK. Now we're on the surface of the planet. From a DOWN-SHOT we see a Sub-Zoner trying to escape to the surface via a Homeworld version of a manhole. He's being pulled back down into Sub-Zone by K'Lar tendrils. K'Lar versions of locusts pock the scenery.
4 (Page 3.) PULLBACK to a BIRD'S-EYE-VIEW to show a slice of the desolate terrain that was once First-Zone's Royal City. The palace and the Body Banks are the only recognizable structures. From this distance the K'Lar locusts look like swarming gnats.
5 PULLBACK. Now we see the EXT of FIRST-ZONE. CROPPED-OFF. Focus on the increasingly larger whole in the protective shell. Atmosphere is leaking out, wisps disappearing along cosmic winds.
6 PULLBACK. Now show me a good ESTABLISHING-SHOT of HOMEWORLD in all its relative glory. The SIX K'LAR LIVING SHIPS are floating in space, unfettered at the moment. Schools of smaller space-squids are shooting about. We're witnessing the quiet before the storm.
